REDO ESSAY !

Please list 10 ways you can improve your essay scores

1. use better and more effective qoutes                          6. restate my thesis
2. better effective thesis statement                                  7. better and more detailed ending statement
3. better expression of maint point for each paragraph    8. double check my grammar
4.effective illustrations                                                    9. make sure i use the right voice style
5. explain more in detail                                                10. and better punctuation and mechanics


Please write any 15 thoughts about the book Slaughterhouse-5.  For each thought, please refer to a specific part of the book that generated this thought (for instance, “It was funny” receives no credit; “It was funny when he described the Tralfamadorians” receives full credit).

1.it was hillarious when he said that he was abducted

2. it was beyond astonishing to see that tralfamadorians had no emotions even if they knew when they were going to die.

3. i was amazed by how extra terrestrials knew about when the world was gonna die

4. i was skeptical when i read that the tralfamdorians knew about the 4th dimension

5.it was hillarious when billy was decribing his wife being fat.

6. i really liked when they asked to keep the three musketeers together caused that showed loyalty even in war.

7.i really disliked how he his wife died and that didn't bother him at all 

8.i also didn't like when he knew about his own death but had no emotions toward it like come on who isn't scared of death

9.i really liked i when he was arguing with his daughter but when she asked him where did you get this from b/c you never mentioned it before the airplane crash and he responded and said that the time wasn't ripe for him to say back than 

10. i thought it was amazing that Roland weary had the first dirty photograph that most definitely made my day 

11. i enjoyed the part were billy went back in time to the y.m.c.a. where his father was going to use the sink or swim technique to teach billy how to swim 

12.i admired the tralfamdorians said that the earthlings should try hard to ignore the awful times and concentrate on the good ones

13.i disagree when the tralfamdorians say that they can't prevent the end of universe 

14.i thought it was funny when montana wildhack screamed when she first saw the tralfamdorians 

15.i also thought it was hillarious when billy slept with montana and said it was heavenly 


State 5 possible themes for the book Slaughterhouse-5.
1.you do what you because you must and not on your own free will

2.life is human being which is only to be enjoyed with the unknowns 

3.life goes on after death 

4.deaths come and go but your life lives on 

5. ignoring wars is impossible when you have free will 


Write a conversation between yourself and Billy Pilgrim in which he tries to teach you a lesson based on his own experiences.  You must explain IN DEPTH at least 3 specific events and details from the book in order to receive full credit.  This conversation should go on as long as it takes to demonstrate YOUR UNDERSTANDING of Billy’s experiences.
EXAMPLE:
Billy: Hello, Mr. Cheng
Mr. Cheng: Hi Billy
Billy: Have you heard about Tralfamadore?
Mr. Cheng: No, what’s that?
Billy: It’s a planet where they... etc.

SIDDARTHA

In the book of Siddhartha it shows that he won’t give up his desires but will also do it in a way were he doesn’t disrespect his parents.. On page 12 Siddhartha stands still until his father comes and says why do you disobey me basically and Siddhartha states that “Siddhartha has always obeyed his father, Siddhartha will do what ever his father tells him” from that quote you can tell that Siddhartha could leave on his own will but doesn’t want to he will not leave in bad terms with his father.      

This shows even though he is a grown man he still has the utmost courtesy. Also shows how much respect he has for his parents and obedience. In my life I as a Muslim we have to show even more respect towards our parents in which when ever they call my name. I always answer with a “yes dad what shall I do for you “that shows that Siddhartha  and I  have much In common even though were from different times and religions. If I ever do something with out my parent’s permission it counts as a bad deed. In Islam your parents must now everything no matter what.

my hero has to be Ronaldo Luís Nazário de Lima. He was born in the poor suburbs of Rio De Janiero www.footbo.com/Players/Ronaldo_1
 his nick name is Fenomeno because when he was born they said first thing he saw was a soccer ball !!!
 no i'm just joking that isn't true. Haha!!

he began his football career playing for cruzeiro when his family were in a tough spot and it was something he could do that he loved and get payed for it and also cruzeiro is where he scored 12 goals in 14 appearances
http://www.cruzeiro.com.br/

prior to his up coming fame he was turned down by his childhood team flamengo but brazillian world cup legend Jairzinho saw his potential and helped him get a transfer offer to psv
http://persona.rin.ru/eng/view/f/0/34630/jairzinho

when heading to the Netherlands he felt like he was crossing into the harder level of playing soccer compared to his home club flamengo. it was like he was crossing into a new world of adventure.
http://wapedia.mobi/en/Ronaldo

in his second season he was marred by a knee injury which kept him out of most of the season, but he still averaged nearly a goal a game in the league, with 12 goals in 13 appearances when he recovered.
expertfootball.com/players/ronaldo/


ronaldo made his first appearance for his long country who considers to be his goddess in 1994 against Argentina in Recife, Brazil.
www.goalvideoz.com/player/ronaldo/


 Ronaldo was involved in a scandal involving three transvestites whom he met at a club in rio.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ronaldo

he was the European Footballer of the Year in 1997 and again won the award in 2002
http://sportsvideo24.com/category/bio/legend-football-player/page/4

some people questioned that he was to fat to play in the 2006 worldcup
soccersplanet.blogspot.com/.../ronaldo-luis-nazrio-de-lima.html

however everyone who doubted him has gotten proved wrong because he was the highest goal scorer in any of the worldcups he leads goals with 15 goals
bleacherreport.com/.../406788-the-other-ronaldo-the-story-of-the-forgotten-phenomenon -

Randy Moss thesis paper

vikings just aquired one of the best wide recievers to ever
play the game.they got randy moss, the best deep threat
wide reciever.
  nobody doubts moss'talents. he is one of the best deep
 threats ever but with moss its always different. a happy
 moss is dynamic while an unhappy moss is a distraction.

 the good things of getting this outrageously great player
 is hes able to do things most wide recievers aren't able
to do in their life time.the only way to do that is by making
happy with a good contract and a great quarterback to
throw to him. i'm pretty sure the vikings can give him both
those requests. the only worry with randy moss is when he
 is unhappy because he tends to be beligerent. like in recent
 years were he left the field with 2 seconds left. so the vikings
have to make him happy as possible. it seems they are keeping
 him happy because in his recent press conference he said that
everything is look very good and the we should get out are
number 84 jersey number and get ready to have som fun.